Student 3A
This essay gets the job done. Granted, its handwriting is equivalent to a three year old amped up on Monster but the words on the page say otherwise. I have not read The Scarlet Letter After a not so great thesis paragraph, everything else is spot on, from the author's voice, to the examples and lack of plot regurgitation. Sure a lot is said, but none of it is filler. All of it is used to talk about, and support the thesis at hand. Congrats Student 3A you get an eight. Bet you couldn't wait to get that score back from me.
Student 3B
I have also not read A Doll's House. I liked this essay, although not as concise as it could be. Some of the middle paragraphs have some plot summary that is not needed, but it does not detract from the overall essay. It flows well between ideas, but falls short of a nine for lack of concision. Don't worry Student 3B, I'd lose point there too. I'd give this essay a seven.
Student 3C
Surprise, I never read Their Eyes Were Watching God, but I felt like I didn't need to while reading the essay. It is bogged down with unnecessary fluff. The thesis paragraph is too long. It does not get to the point fast enough. The conclusion has some of the same problems, but is not to the extent of the thesis paragraph. While not part of the AP grading, this writer took huge indents between paragraphs. I would have given this a five.
This essay gets the job done. Granted, its handwriting is equivalent to a three year old amped up on Monster but the words on the page say otherwise. I have not read The Scarlet Letter After a not so great thesis paragraph, everything else is spot on, from the author's voice, to the examples and lack of plot regurgitation. Sure a lot is said, but none of it is filler. All of it is used to talk about, and support the thesis at hand. Congrats Student 3A you get an eight. Bet you couldn't wait to get that score back from me.
Student 3B
I have also not read A Doll's House. I liked this essay, although not as concise as it could be. Some of the middle paragraphs have some plot summary that is not needed, but it does not detract from the overall essay. It flows well between ideas, but falls short of a nine for lack of concision. Don't worry Student 3B, I'd lose point there too. I'd give this essay a seven.
Student 3C
Surprise, I never read Their Eyes Were Watching God, but I felt like I didn't need to while reading the essay. It is bogged down with unnecessary fluff. The thesis paragraph is too long. It does not get to the point fast enough. The conclusion has some of the same problems, but is not to the extent of the thesis paragraph. While not part of the AP grading, this writer took huge indents between paragraphs. I would have given this a five.
Hi Nick,
ReplyDeleteGood job on your blog post. I like how you talked about each student writer's ability to get to the point while providing ample evidence and showing understanding for the book. I think this is one area that I have trouble. Although I know I can assume the reader is someone educated so I don't have to go out of my way to explain the plot, I also want to provide enough background information for my essay to flow and make sense.
Hi Nick,
ReplyDeleteNice job on analyzing why the students lost points. Did you have any problem with reading the handwriting? I'm not sure this is necessary but sometimes I like to put in a score like what they would actually give on an AP test. I feel like that makes you think more like an AP grader which will give a new perspective when we're actually writing our AP essay.
Hey Nick
ReplyDeleteI thought you did a great job on your post. I liked how concise and to the point it was and how it's so funny. You definitely have the spunk in your post. You might want to be a tad more specific on what you actually like and quote some lines from the students essay so we get a better feel and understanding for it. Also how were the warrants and evidence for the 2nd and 3rd essay? You do say a lot about if they are talking about the plot but you also might want to add you opinion on how they did with answering the prompt/thesis and such. But overall great job!